Huge thanks to everyone who has helped me out with my pitch/query so far! I've tried to take all of your comments and suggestions to heart, and hopefully this query is a lot better. (The original query post is HERE.)
I need a 200-word pitch for WriteOnCon (going on now), as well as a 35-word pitch for PitchMadness, courtesy of the fabulous Brenda Drake, happening later this week!
Please let me know if you like the changes I've made!
Thanks again for all of your help so far!
200-word PITCH for WriteOnCon:
Had she known she was descended from The Beast of fairytale lore, seventeen-year-old Holland Briggs wouldn’t have been shocked by the accusations of crimes she didn’t remember committing. But with no recollection of torching her ex-boyfriend’s house or poisoning his new girlfriend, and no knowledge of her cursed fate, these accusations devastate Holland’s world. Striving to pick up the shattered pieces of her life, Holland is no longer revered or admired. Not even the social lepers want to be seen with the school’s freak pyromaniac.
Armed with the knowledge of what the future holds for Holland Briggs, Mick Stevenson has one purpose in life: to save her from the curse that has haunted the Briggs family for generations. To do so, he must fall in love with Holland, earn her love in return, then break the centuries-old spell. Incorrectly trusting that time is on his side, Mick leisurely gets to know Holland, finding it incredibly easy to fall for the broken beauty.
But as Holland begins changing way before schedule, the dangerous side of her nature is revealed, and Mick struggles to find a way to free her.
He must succeed, because failure means losing Holland to the beast forever.
35-word Pitch for PitchMad:
There are a few things Holland Briggs didn’t plan on for her senior year: burning her ex’s house down, poisoning her ex-best friend, or turning into the Beast most have only heard of in fairytales.